Last week in Te Ngahere we did some descriptive writing about a moment in time. We had to
describe the forest using present tense verbs. We were focusing on using descriptive language
and the correct structure for our writing. I enjoyed just thinking about what you could see,
hear, feel and smell. I think I could improve by adding more descriptive language,
like metaphors and alliteration. This is my first draft writing.
A Moment In Time
Birds song ringing through the trees
The forest canopy stretching far up into the bright blue sky, aged leaves fluttering to the ground at every breath of wind
The glaring sun piercing through the glade, casting a soft light upon the forest floor
Leaf skeletons emitting a gentle glow
Delicate branches sweeping the forest floor
Spongy bark clinging to tall spindly trees
A stream of light filtering through insect eaten leaves
Cicadas high pitched humming
Tui’s rumbling call echoing around
Bright red puriri berries scattered across the forest floor
Kauri trees standing tall, almost touching the sky
Manuka, their black bark peeling of
People everywhere can help preserve this beautiful scene
Kia ora Astin,
ReplyDeleteIt’s Arihia. I think your moment in time writing is very descriptive. I think you did awesome in your writing and I like the words you used. Your writing describes the photo you wrote about really well.
Keep up the great work!
Kia ora Astin it’s AJ. I really like your blog post about the moment in time writing it is really descriptive. My favourite line was Delicate branches sweeping the forest floor. Keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteYours faithly AJ.